Comments on: “My Father Danced” This poem is a rewrite from 2007, comments please?

By: autumlovr

autumlovr — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 11:28:55 +0000

This is simply beautiful Jenny. A most heartwarming piece and so well written. Kudos!!

By: kathwah

kathwah — Sun, 07 Feb 2010 03:27:38 +0000

Having lost my Dad..this sang to me..thankyou jenny

By: Cillahairbunsaresexy

Cilla*hairbunsaresexy* — Fri, 05 Feb 2010 12:17:45 +0000

This gave me chills and tears.
WOW.
I love the progression from dancing with your mother, to having you dance on his feet, to the father-daughter dances, to the marriage dance to the last dance. Wow again. This evoked a lot of emotion and it is VERY well written.

By: neonman

neonman — Wed, 03 Feb 2010 18:39:07 +0000

Some edits first: Maybe add ‘before’ in line 7. Line 12 maybe add ‘and round’ for repetition of rhyme. Line 16 maybe add ‘as’.

Now as to the poem. Really nice. Loved the ending as it brought it full circle and reinforced the love from your father to his daughters. You must have been blessed to have him as a Dad.

By: Intrusivosity With Medium Doubt

Intrusivosity With Medium Doubt — Tue, 02 Feb 2010 00:38:01 +0000

I can hear the orchestra in your poem at
“we laughed and spun around.”.

Now Dance With A Star .

By: Socrates

Socrates — Mon, 01 Feb 2010 15:39:53 +0000

The music was great…
…all the way to the very last line.

By: ma

ma — Mon, 01 Feb 2010 07:00:08 +0000

Marvelous, absolutely marvelous.
There was a time, long, long ago, when I danced atop my father’s shoes.

By: Law Man

Law Man — Thu, 28 Jan 2010 23:14:20 +0000

What a wonderful tribute to your dad. This read very well, and brought a smile to my lips.

By: Lindsey M

Lindsey M — Tue, 26 Jan 2010 12:47:20 +0000

i think this sounds really really good*